Students choose the best revision for choppy volcano sentences, identify the off-topic sentence in a dolphins paragraph, and select the correct grammar edits for a sentence with multiple errors. Part B has five fill-in-the-blank problems about sentence variety, removing redundant sentences, and writing strong introductions.
Choosing among multiple revision and editing options mirrors the real decisions writers make and prepares students for extended writing tasks at the middle school level.
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Editing & Revising
Part A: Multiple Choice
Circle the best answer for each question.
1. Read: "The volcano erupted. It was loud. Rocks went everywhere. It was scary." Which revision BEST improves this passage?
A) Add a comma after "erupted."
B) Change "scary" to "scarey."
C) Combine and revise: "The volcano erupted with a thunderous roar, launching jagged rocks across the ashy landscape."
D) Delete the last sentence.
2. Read: "Dolphins are smart. My family went to the beach last summer. Dolphins use clicking sounds to communicate." Which change BEST improves this paragraph?
A) Change "smart" to "intelligent."
B) Remove the sentence about the beach trip because it is off-topic.
C) Add an exclamation point after "communicate."
D) Move the last sentence to the beginning.
3. Read: "the student forgotted their homework at home, they was upset about it." Which edit corrects ALL errors in this sentence?
A) "The student forgotted their homework at home. They was upset about it."
B) "The student forgot their homework at home, and they were upset about it."
C) "the student forgot their homework at home, they were upset about it."
D) "The student forgotted their homework at home, they were upset."
4. A student writes: "We should save water. Water is important. We need water." Which revision strategy would MOST improve this paragraph?
A) Edit for comma usage throughout.
B) Combine repetitive sentences and add specific reasons why saving water matters.
C) Change all periods to exclamation points for emphasis.
D) Add the word "also" before each sentence.
Part B: Fill in the Blank
Write the correct answer on each line.
1. Combining short, choppy sentences into longer ones improves sentence fluency.
2. When a paragraph repeats the same idea, the writer should remove the redundant sentences.
3. A strong introduction grabs the reader's attention and presents the main idea.
4. Replacing "a lot of" with a precise word like "numerous" is a revision improvement.
5. After revising and editing, the final step in the writing process is publishing.
Editing & Revising
★ Part A: Multiple Choice
Circle the best answer for each question.
1. Read: "The volcano erupted. It was loud. Rocks went everywhere. It was scary." Which revision BEST improves this passage?
A) Add a comma after "erupted."
B) Change "scary" to "scarey."
C) Combine and revise: "The volcano erupted with a thunderous roar, launching jagged rocks across the ashy landscape."
D) Delete the last sentence.
2. Read: "Dolphins are smart. My family went to the beach last summer. Dolphins use clicking sounds to communicate." Which change BEST improves this paragraph?
A) Change "smart" to "intelligent."
B) Remove the sentence about the beach trip because it is off-topic.
C) Add an exclamation point after "communicate."
D) Move the last sentence to the beginning.
3. Read: "the student forgotted their homework at home, they was upset about it." Which edit corrects ALL errors in this sentence?
A) "The student forgotted their homework at home. They was upset about it."
B) "The student forgot their homework at home, and they were upset about it."
C) "the student forgot their homework at home, they were upset about it."
D) "The student forgotted their homework at home, they were upset."
4. A student writes: "We should save water. Water is important. We need water." Which revision strategy would MOST improve this paragraph?
A) Edit for comma usage throughout.
B) Combine repetitive sentences and add specific reasons why saving water matters.
C) Change all periods to exclamation points for emphasis.
D) Add the word "also" before each sentence.
★ Part B: Fill in the Blank
Write the correct answer on each line.
1) Combining short, choppy sentences into longer ones improves sentence fluency.
2) When a paragraph repeats the same idea, the writer should remove the redundant sentences.
3) A strong introduction grabs the reader's attention and presents the main idea.
4) Replacing "a lot of" with a precise word like "numerous" is a revision improvement.
5) After revising and editing, the final step in the writing process is publishing.
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